This is about Solar panels im going to link my other essays i’ve done and most of the corrections he said. he’s a really tough grader so please take note that the thests must be in bold and under 13 words. each sentence has to be under 18 words or hell take off point for that.please don’t use vague words.
The research paper is the culmination of all your work. This paper is a comprehensive argument; however, you will not rely on existing positions for arguments. You will make your own position where you propose ideas and solutions to the issue you’ve researched. The paper is formal, exact, and meant to be read by experts of the field.
Imagine your specific audience. They can be other scholars, government officials, heads of corporations. This is your time to impress them with your ideas. They want to know what you know. They are counting on you to recommend a solution to satisfy everyone. You will need to write not just in favor of your position, but by anticipating the kinds of questions they’re likely to ask and work them into your position.
Most importantly, you need to be specific about what your audience is supposed to do. Simply calling the government to take action is not enough. What action? Do you want Congress to make a law? Fine, what should it say? You are the expert they’re calling on who has looked at this topic from all angles and know the exact content of what the law should be and why. Be mindful of the economics, the effect on society, the public’s perception, the legal issues, and the current state of things.
The goal is to gain acceptance, for these people to recognize the worth of your argument, and follow-through on the specific action(s) you recommend. This is your application to become an expert yourself.
Assignment Requirements:
Essays must be from 1500+ words. Max grade of C for shorter essays. 1/2 length essays not accepted.
Max grade of C for essays without a clear, arguable thesis that employs strong verbs (avoid passives and helper verbs) and is free from vague language.
One grade penalty for thesis statements over 13 words.
One grade penalty for a list thesis.
One grade penalty if the thesis ends in a question mark.
One grade penalty for 1st (I, my, we, our, us, etc.) or 2nd (you, your) POV. Write in 3rd person.
Each missing citation penalized 1 letter grade (in-text or Works Cited)
(minimum of 7 quality sources, 2 of which must be peer-reviewed). Automatic 0 for no citations.
You are free to use other types of sources, even those not reviewed, if you can substantiate the information from other sources (which you would also need to cite).
I will randomly check source URLs. Make sure your URLs are correct and lead to the source. Invalid URLs will be penalized.
One grade penalty for each missing type and medium at the end of works cited entries.
Half grade penalty for each incorrect type identifications. You must have made a good-faith effort to correctly identify the source type according to the handouts in class and your own research into identifying and evaluating sources.
You must integrate quotes from your sources into a cohesive argument (do not use them just to summarize information). Be careful that you do not spend the majority of your essay explaining the technology. Keep focused on the issues. In your discussion of the issues, you will naturally inform your reader while making your argument.
One grade penalty for each dropped or standalone quotation.
One grade penalty for each introduced quotation: The article states “blah blah blah” or Author notes “blah blah blah.”
I will randomly search your sources for your integrated quotations. Make sure you quote accurately (and not take them out of context) or I will conclude an AI hallucinated your quote.
Two grade penalty for each hallucinated source.
You are limited to one (1) block quote for your entire essay. Remember that a block quote must be necessary to explain something technical. The quote does not explain itself, though, and you must provide context for it, at least as long as the quote itself, but do not simply paraphrase the quote.
Write concisely. Cut unnecessary words. Overly long and complicated sentences obscuring meaning.
Focus paragraphs on one idea. Overly long paragraphs lose their arguments.
The questions below are to help guide your examination of the topic. After each question, you will also need to ask: What do you recommend is the next step to bring this technology to people safely? or What changes need to be made to maximize the benefits and minimize the consequences of the technology?
What future impacts on society will this technology have?
Why is (or isn’t) the technology currently in widespread use by society?
What have been the cultural effects of this technology, and how will society evaluate these effects?
Can the technology be corrupted to cause harm (in any sense)?
For the works cited please
some corrections-
Incorrect Source Type
TYPES: You have incorrectly identified the type of source. You must look closely and
consult the Identifying Sources handout. Your source type must be one of those listed, no
others! Thoroughly read the descriiptions and compare that to the information you have from
the source. Look closely at the publishers. Use the keys listed in the handout to identify the
features of the source such as mission, authorship, frequency, and readership.
CATEGORIES: The sources are broken into different categories: Perennial,
Periodical, Agency, and Personal. You must select a specific type of source from within
one of those four broad categories. The categories help you understand the kind of
publisher it is. They’re a tool to help you narrow down the type
ARTICLES: Articles are not NOT valid source types. Articles are a general term for
published essay in academic journals, magazines, newspapers, websites, blogs, etc.”
from the teacher- “Vague audience
Your audiences is too generalized. You need to get more specific about the audience. Who,
specifically, are they? What powers do they have to change things? What interest do they have in
making the change?
Audience, not argument
The assignment was to discuss the audience for your argument, not give your actual
argument. Before you can properly make an argument, you need to know who is going to be
listening to it. Without that information, you can’t properly tailor your words to them.
First, your goal of making the agency aware of the technology is not valid. By your own
admission, the EPA is already aware of solar panels as they cite regulations and initiatives abou
recycling them and their efficiency. Second, this is not a pro/con essay. You are not here to
argue the benefits of anything. Your goal for this paper, as I have said repeatedly in-person, in
feedback, and in the assignment descriiptions is to argue for a specific change to be made
regarding this technology.
Vague ideas
Your writing is vague, referring to generalized ideas or unspecified ideas. Be specific when
you can. You wouldn’t listen to a district attorney who charged someone with “crimes and stuff”
or only said that the defendant “is guilty” without telling you what it was they were guilty of.
Many times I see X is important, but I don’t know why. Sometimes X is so generalized as to
be meaningless, such as “Education is important.” In what way? What specific kind of
education? Often writing is vague because you don’t have an answer, but you need to have an
answer. If you can’t tell the why or the how, then your reader is left with these questions, and
will question your credibility. Have an answer and be specific.
Get rid of vague language. Be specific about the ideas. Take out vague words: something,
thing, anything, stuff; change POV pronouns to actual objects or names. Ask the who, what,
where, which, how, and why questions and come up with answers. Tell the reader about these
answers. When you read what you wrote, you shouldn’t have many questions left. As the reader
your reaction should be a statement: Tell me more.” This feels like you were trying to reach the word count. Many of your sentences and phrases
are unnecessary or even repetitive. You need more substance to your topics. Find more to
talk about that matters instead of trying to stretch things out.
Using the full title of articles is a waste of words, especially when you can more easily cite
the author. Not only are the titles cumbersome to get through when reading and take up space,
they delay the impact of your sentence. You are not saying anything, just use up words. Say
more. Pad less.
Powers and Procedures
What are the powers and procedures of the audience How do they operate? What are
their limits? What are their resources to do what you want them to do? If you don’t
understand how they operate, you will not be able to tailor the argument to them. If you
ask for something they can’t do, you have wasted everyone’s time. You need to know
specifics about this audience in order to write for them effectively. Vague, general
knowledge about their existence won’t do it.”
this is the corrections for reasearch proposal “The issues are more complex than this. Get into why this technology has yet to be adopted. For instance, solar power: What are the obstacles that get in the way of this technology? Look at economics, infrastructure, government involvement, efficiency, etc. Or make a recommendation as to what specific regulations should govern this technology.
You will have to write an argumentative research paper on this topic, so what can be argued on this topic? This is a vital component of the proposal so that I know you understand where you are taking this project. Bring in a detailed list of some of the arguments for this issue, and tell me which ones most appeal to you to write a long paper on.
What are the issues?
You will have to write an argumentative research paper on this topic, so what can be argued on this topic? This is a vital component of the proposal so that I know you understand where you are taking this project. Bring in a detailed list of some of the arguments for this issue, and tell me which ones most appeal to you to write a long paper on.
Write up a paragraph that explores the arguable issues and bring it to the defense.
Missing audience
Who can make a change with regards to this topic? It must be a person or group who has the authority and ability to make such a change. You will need to know who this is in order to tailor your argument to their needs and convince them to make the change you propose. You will need to tailor your argument to their needs and convince them to make the change you propose.
Referring obliquely to various stakeholder or policymakers is not an identification of who can has the ability to change this topic. As mentioned, you need to tailor your argument to their specific needs, so you need to do better at identifying who they are. Even saying the government isn’t enough because the branches operate differently in the federal government, there are differences between state and local operations, and even various executive departments function and are organized differently.
NOTE: Your audience cannot be the public, citizens, the people, consumers, etc. They do not have the authority or power to make change to your specific tech.”
please also use intergrating quotations